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Band 3

Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

The most important job
to
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the
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apply
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parents
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it
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apply
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is
educate
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to educate
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 their
children
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due to
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this
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which
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course study
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helps
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 them
being
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become
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 good
parents
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. I completely agree that all
parents
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 should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good
parents
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.
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, it is a good way to know how to raise a
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children
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child
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 because not everyone knows how to raise a good child. Parenting requires knowledge about education
,
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apply
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 and emotional care.
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, many
parents
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 do not know how to handle a child’s bad
behavior
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behaviour
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 or how to support their learning. I think
coursed
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courses
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 can teach them effective communication and discipline methods.
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 would help
children
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 grow up in a healthy and loving environment.
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, growing up
child
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a child
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 today is not easy. Many
parents
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 are busy with work and do not always know the best way to take care of their
children
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. A short course can teach them useful things
such
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 as how to talk with
children
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, how to deal with bad
behavior
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behaviour
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, and how to support their studies.
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,
parents
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 can learn how to listen to their child’s feelings and solve problems calmly.
This
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 knowledge can make family life happier and less stressful. In conclusion, I believe that mothers and fathers should learn themselves how to deal with their
children
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’s
behavior
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behaviour
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.
This
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 would help them raise their
children
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 better

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task response
Add more detail and real examples to back each idea.
coherence cohesion
Use one idea per paragraph and add a clear topic sentence.
language
Use simple words and fix common grammar mistakes.
grammar
Check articles and verb forms; read aloud to find mistakes.
content
Clear stance on the issue.
language
Easy to read and simple language.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parenting skills
  • Child development
  • Mandatory courses
  • Nutrition
  • Discipline strategies
  • Effective communication
  • Government regulations
  • Voluntary workshops
  • Community support
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Personal beliefs
  • Emotionally stable
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