Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
As tourism has become a flourished industry in the past few decades, there has been a debate over charging visitors from overseas more than the locals
in
historical sites. In my opinion, I completely disagree with Change preposition
at
this
point of view.
On one hand, the Linking Words
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in Correct your spelling
argument
favor
of charging foreign Change the spelling
favour
tourists
more might rise among the residents Use synonyms
due to
the taxation, which means the national monuments depending on governments' subsidies for maintenance have already been paid Linking Words
by
them. Change preposition
for by
Moreover
, increasing Linking Words
tourists
' Use synonyms
payment
could somehow prevent Replace the word
pay
conjunction
of sites' Correct article usage
the conjunction
surrounding
, and improve their life quality. Replace the word
surroundings
Thus
, it is reasonable to divide tickets into different prices for Linking Words
the
equality. Correct article usage
apply
However
, I consider it a shortsighted view.
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On the other hand
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differentiate
the cost between foreigners and locals might lead to a negative consequence. Wrong verb form
differentiating
Firstly
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travelers
from abroad contribute to the economy of the host country in a wide Change the spelling
travellers
rage
, Correct your spelling
range
such
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suveniours
, accommodation, and traffic. Nations could thrive Correct your spelling
souvenirs
due to
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overall
financial growth. Linking Words
Secondly
, there might be monetary spam from some unscrupulous people, which would lead to counterproductive effects Linking Words
such
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significant Correct article usage
apply
disapointment
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disappointment
of
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tourists
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, it is not necessary to emphasize Linking Words
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apply
on
implementing a higher price for them. Change preposition
apply
Instead
, the residents and authorities should be Linking Words
honored
to subsidize meaningful attractions in their nation and attract more Change the spelling
honoured
tourists
to visit.
In conclusion, it is a long-term vision when a country Use synonyms
charge
both Correct subject-verb agreement
charges
travelers
and inhabitants equally as the result in Change the spelling
travellers
overall
national economic improvement excels the higher monetary requirement to foreign visitors. Afterwards, promote Linking Words
nation's
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the nation's
culture
legacy Replace the word
cultural
further
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