The chart below shows the changes that took place in three various areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three various areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.
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The changes that
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in three various areas of crime in New Port city
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between 2003 and 2012
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line chart. A glance at the line chart provided reveals that, in 2004, burglary was the most
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and outweighed the rate of car theft, which fell slightly.
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robbery was the lowest among the other types of crime over the
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shown. In 2003, burglaries were at a rate of nearly 3500 per year.
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peaked at 3750, after that dropped considerably at 1100 in 2008 and was remaining until the end of the
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, car thefts began the
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lower, dipped to 2000 and rose with minor numbers to 2750 in 2012. The least common was robbery. Statistics found over 500 robberies in 2003 and remaining under 1000 at
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of time, finishing at 750 in 2012.
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