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The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate the changes, which have taken place
at
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in
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 the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to
present
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the present
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 time.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the farmlands were replaced by a golf and a tennis
area
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, and the forest
park
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 was
tear
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torn
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 down. New four apartments were
build
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built
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replacying
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replacing
 the fish market, and the shop
was convert
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was converted
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 into a new restaurant. In 1995, to the north of the
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map
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map,
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 there were farmlands next to the forest
park
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. On the other side of the road, there was a housing
area
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 along the
middel
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middle
 road. To the south of the sea, there was a fishing market and a shop
were
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was
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 located on the opposite side of the road. A fishing port was located in the sea. Turning to the
present day
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present-day
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map
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, it can be seen that the fishing facilities were all gone, being replaced by four apartments and the cafe stay
at
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in
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 the same place. A new car
park
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 has been built next to the hotel, and the shop
was convert
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was converted
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 into
restaurant
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a restaurant
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. To the north of the
map
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, the housing
area
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increase
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increases
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 in size by adding two more houses. In the east of the
map
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, sports facilities
consist
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consisting
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 of golf and tennis
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area
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areas
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 have been constructed
instead
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 of farmlands and forest
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park
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parks
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.
However
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, the hotel remains unchanged at the same place.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, park, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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