Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there are fewer
people
writing by hand.
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writer argues that there are important reasons
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related to the improvement of technology, and in my
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these have been largely negative
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as
it
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prevents
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the development of children when they just started to know writing. It cannot be denied that the evolution of technology in recent years has helped
people
in many ways. One of the benefits of mechanization is
upgraded
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writing abilities of
human
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. With new features and
its
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mechanism
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that
easy
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to understand,
people
can apprehend it well and make their work
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more convenient. They will be more flexible in using
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to
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and import information faster than using paper to write it down.
Moreover
,
people
can save their process for
another days
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to do more extra
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and
also
prevent losing their work by accident.
For example
,
people
who work as accountants nowadays
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more comfortable when they deal with complex data than before as they use paper and handwriting to note the data and sometimes mistakes are inevitable.
However
, there is another argument that should be considered is that typing on a computer can affect children's improvement.
In other words
, if they expose themselves to computers too early, they will not know how to write and understand basic letters, as it just shows them the symbols but cannot explain
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and will make they feel hard for them to study alphabetical characters.
Consequently
, they will become illiterate and seems that they will take
along
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time to regain their ability.
Moreover
,
people
will lose their traditional
skill
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and practices when they rely too much on computer typing.
To sum up
, there are more negative
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than positive
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the long run, as the benefits are too tiny with the drawbacks.
However
, we should consider
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typewriting
as
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its potential
affect
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to
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humans nowadays.
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