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The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following diagram shows the process of cloning a sheep. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram depicts how to duplicate a
sheep
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.
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, it is a complex process containing many stages. Begin with
combine
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 the genes from two exclusive female
sheep
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, and culminating with the third
sheep
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 breed the lamp which is a clone of
sheep
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 A The initial stage focuses on extracting the gene from 2 different female
sheep
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,
sheep
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 A provides the body cells. After that, the DNA has been excerpted from the body cell ,which contains a gene about the function of
sheep
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 A. In terms of
sheep
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 B, the scientists take the
egg
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 cell from the ovary.
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 the nucleus has been taken out of the
egg
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 in order to make it empty. After all those mentioned stages, the DNA from
sheep
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 A and the eggshell from
sheep
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 B are merged together by
the
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high voltages up to 200,000 volts. Turning to the final stages, the
egg
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 is nurtured to make it bigger by t he mitosis process. After which, the
egg
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 is injected into the third lamp. The embryo is grown up and emerges the finished lamp.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sheep, egg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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