the diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now

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noticable

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noticeable

is the change in transportation

infracstructure

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infrastructure

which transformed from

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a rectangle

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to a

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form.

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, the playing fields

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narrowed in order to pave the way for amenities. With regards to the top central region where there once was a road surrounding the car park , created a form which has been

demonlished

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demolished

from the rectangle shape to the

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one.

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, the road which used to link the parking space and the

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playing

fields together, now was repurposed by

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green space. In terms of the playing fields which

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reduced so as to not only erect a new pool and fitness centre but

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save the space for the classroom relocated to be

adjascent

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adjacent

the pool and one more was built on the opposite side.

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that, the classroom block was developed from two storeys to three storeys.

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library was demolished to

contrust

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construct

contrast

the learning resources centre involving the computer room,

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the office has remained untouched.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

178 words

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the diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Some people think painting and drawings are important as other subjects. They should be compulsory in high school education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it is beneficial for children to play games online, while others think that it can be harmful for children. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?