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the diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now

the diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now
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Provided are two maps showing how a school changed from 1985 until now
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,
most
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noticable
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noticeable
 is the change in transportation
infracstructure
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infrastructure
 which transformed from
rectangle
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a rectangle
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 to a
curve
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 form.
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, the playing fields
was
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 narrowed in order to pave the way for amenities. With regards to the top central region where there once was a road surrounding the car park , created a form which has been
demonlished
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demolished
 from the rectangle shape to the
curve
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 one.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the road which used to link the parking space and the
playng
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playing
 fields together, now was repurposed by
the
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 green space. In terms of the playing fields which
was
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 reduced so as to not only erect a new pool and fitness centre but
also
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 save the space for the classroom relocated to be
adjascent
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adjacent
 the pool and one more was built on the opposite side.
Beside
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 that, the classroom block was developed from two storeys to three storeys.
As for the
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 library was demolished to
contrust
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construct
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 the learning resources centre involving the computer room,
while
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 the office has remained untouched.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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