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In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernise, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many old
skyscrapers
 are updated by destroying them to provide space for the new ones. Destroying the
skyscrapers
 can lead to some problems like the expenditure to terminate them is quite high.
Nevertheless
, the new
skyscrapers
 that come from the level-up process have great sustainability. Urban development has abruptly changed how
skyscrapers
 are formed.
This
 makes older
skyscrapers
 out of date and needs to change by grounding them. Though demolishing them has some difficulties as leveling the
skyscrapers
 to the ground safely requires complex planning.
Furthermore
, those strategies should
also
 be carefully executed for safety measures.
Due to
 that action, it will require some time before the complex is fully grounded.
As a result
, it could potentially increase the
skyscrapers
' building expenditure. Architects claim that it will double the required budget to destroy a
skyscraper
. In 2012, a landmark tower was built for an e-commerce corporation named Shopee after destroying the previous tower. Executives claim that the total is 2 billion more than the planned expenditure and proof that destroying
skyscrapers
 can increase project costs. Creating new
skyscrapers
 means it will follow the current standard for them. It is easier to incorporate plans for the new
skyscraper
. The plans are
also
 directly shaped by that standard. Standardization was made to preserve the
skyscrapers
' lifespan. Experts state that the
skyscrapers
 that were built after 2000, which followed the prolonged rule, have a lifetime of about a century.
That is
also
 supported by research from checking two
skyscraper
 structures that have been hit by an earthquake. The result is
skyscraper
 that was built after 2000 still has a greater core than another
skyscraper
 that was built before 2000.
This
 is evidence of how sustainable the new
skyscraper
 is and makes the budget problem for demolishing seem acceptable. In Short, The main problem of grounding
skyscrapers
 is the budget amount. Even so, the new
skyscrapers
 have great sustainability and those come from the demolishing process, making the expenses come from grounding them more worthwhile.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demolition
  • Modernisation
  • Historical significance
  • Architectural heritage
  • Community identity
  • Environmental impact
  • Unique craftsmanship
  • Cost-efficient
  • Tourism revenues
  • Sense of place
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