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The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.

The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.
#information #costings #forestry #west #africa #america #south-east #asia #years #spendings #projects #first #year
The table provides data on supposed prices for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia for the next 5
years
,
whereas
, the pie chart presents
projects's
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projects
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 spent money for the first year.
Overall
, during the course of five
years
,
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia accounted for the highest forecasted cost, with West Africa as the one
who
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that
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 scored the least amount of money. Meanwhile,
according to
pie
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the pie
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 chart,
category
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categories
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 like salaries attained the half of the chart, set-up costs after. The expected prices, in
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia, made up a significant price of 50 million during the
last
 three
years
,
in contrast
, West Africa and Central America's costs
decrease
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 by half, compared to
first
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the first
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 two
years
. Moving on to the projected expenditure in
first
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the first
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 year. Salaries attained 50%, following after, set-up costs were lower by 20% compared to wages.
Subsequently
, 20% had two other categories
like
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apply
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training and office expenses.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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