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Some believe that the development of technology and improved software allow us to translate between language automatically. Therefor, it is not necessary to learn foreign languages any more. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are some
people
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 who believe that the advancement of technology and better software help
people
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 to translate languages automatically so they do not need to learn a new
language
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. The writer of
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 essay strongly disagrees with
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 notion
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 employment possibilities
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 requesting assistance. It is vital to understand that learning a second
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 is essential because of professional prospects.
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, many companies require their employees to have marketable skills in international business in order to communicate effectively with clients and colleagues, which allows for building relationships in the global market.
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, Chinese factories in Vietnam recruit proficient
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 in Chinese to ensure clear communication with their customers.
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, studying a new foreign
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 opens up job chances for
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. Another key component of
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 case is understanding a new
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 helps
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 to ask for assistance. To put it simply, in some emergency situations,
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 can not use translation applications to communicate so as to ask for help,
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 why they need to use their own foreign
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 skills to convey their desires and express their emotions.
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, if someone travels in an alien nation and encounters an emergency speaking the local
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 will facilitate seeking support from local services.
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, knowing new languages allows residents to convey their situation accurately and efficiently. In conclusion, the evolution of technology and software leads
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 to
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 that knowing a second
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 is not essential anymore,
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,
language
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 proficiency provides
individuals
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 with professional work opportunities and seek help in urgent circumstances

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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