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The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007 ,2011 and 2015 .

The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007 ,2011 and 2015 .
#household #income
The bar chart depicts the amount of the
houshold
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household
 by annual income in various years. It is clear from the graph that the average amount of
house
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houses
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 continuously dominated in 2015 by 1000000 or more.
While
 the equivalent figure for
household
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households
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 between 75 and 99 ranked the lowest over the period shown.
According to
 what is shown, in 2007 the number of
household
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households
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 by 1000, 00 or more rose to 29% approximately.
However
, in 2011 the number of
household
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households
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deceased
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decreased
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 to 24% nearly
then
 sharply increased
above
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to
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 30% in 2015.
On the other hand
, the number of
household
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households
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 between
50,000to
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50,000 to
 74000
remain
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remains
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 unchanged throughout the
yeaar
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year
years
.
Also
, the
householdls
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households
household
 less than 25% remain stable ,
wherease
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whereas
 the
household
 between 500000 750000
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 during the period of that time .
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household income
  • income brackets
  • trend analysis
  • income distribution
  • economic policies
  • inflation
  • job market
  • notable shifts
  • overall trend
  • low-income households
  • middle-income households
  • high-income households
  • time periods
  • factors contributing
  • implications
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