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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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bar chart illustrates information about the
number
 of
illiteracy
people
 separated into two genders in six different areas around the world in the previous year. The units are in per cent.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
 of
men
 who were illiterate was always smaller than the one of
women
. It should
also
 be noted how
Sarahan
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South
 Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
 had the
number
 of
illiteracy
people
 over half of the total population. Regards to the regions which had a proportion of both genders who were
illiteracy
 under 30, Developed countries had only approximately 2% of
men
 and 4% of
women
 who were
illiteracy
,
whereas
 the percentages were exactly 10% for
men
 and 12% for
women
 in Carribean region.
Additionally
, the
number
 of
illiteracy
men
 in East
Asia
 was smaller about 2% and that of
women
 was
bigger
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almost doubled in comparison with the Latin American area. Focusing on the regions the total
illiteracy
people
more
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 than 50% of the population,
the
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number
 of
men
 who were
illiteracy
 was more than 30% in Sarahan Africa and under 30% in the Arab States
while
 that in South
Asia
 was about 35%.
Moreover
, the proportion of
women
illiteracy
 in Sarahan, Arab and South
Asia
were
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48, 52 and 56, leading to the undeniable fact that South
Asia
 was the region the rest of the
people
 did not know how to read.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, illiteracy, people, men, women, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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