The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010

The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010
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chart above illustrates how much the GDP increased per year in three different countries from 2007 to 2010. In general,
three
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countries had different levels but in 2008, they had close GDP growth levels. First of all, in 2007,
Tunisia
, which was the most grown country, increased just over
percent
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of 6.
Japan
and
Ecuador
also
grew, but they were less than
Tunisia
.
Japan
increased by 2 and
Ecuador
rose
almost
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3
percent
. In 2008, sorting changed and the most increased
Ecuador
rose just under
percent
5. The
second
one
,
Tunisia
, increased between 4
percent
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and 5
percent
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and the third
one
grew
almost
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4
percent
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. In 2009, the most grown
Japan
increased
more
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than 5
percent
. Once again,
second
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one
,
Tunisia
rose just over
percent
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of 3.
Ecuador
grew the least
in
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this
year. In the
last
year, the
second
one
was
Japan
. It grew more than 6
percent
. The
second
one
,
Tunisia
rose
3
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percent
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and
finally
,
Ecuador
increased
almost
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2
percent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tunisia, percent, japan, ecuador, second, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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