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The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010

The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010
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chart above illustrates how much the GDP increased per year in three different countries from 2007 to 2010. In general,
three
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 countries had different levels but in 2008, they had close GDP growth levels. First of all, in 2007,
Tunisia
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, which was the most grown country, increased just over
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percent
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 of 6.
Japan
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 and
Ecuador
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 grew, but they were less than
Tunisia
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.
Japan
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 increased by 2 and
Ecuador
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 rose
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 3
percent
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. In 2008, sorting changed and the most increased
Ecuador
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 rose just under
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 5. The
second
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one
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,
Tunisia
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, increased between 4
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percent
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 and 5
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percent
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 and the third
one
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 grew
almost
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 4
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percent
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. In 2009, the most grown
Japan
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 increased
more
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 than 5
percent
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. Once again,
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second
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one
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,
Tunisia
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 rose just over
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percent
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 of 3.
Ecuador
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 grew the least
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 year. In the
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 year, the
second
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one
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 was
Japan
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. It grew more than 6
percent
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. The
second
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one
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,
Tunisia
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 rose
3
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by 3
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percent
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 and
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,
Ecuador
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 increased
almost
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 2
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percent
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tunisia, percent, japan, ecuador, second, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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