In recent years, “responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These past few years,
people
are
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arguing
on
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about
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lack
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the lack
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of possibility someone can become a "
reponsible
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responsible
tourist
" or
having
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attention to take care of the culture and
sorroundings
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surroundings
of the places he/
se
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she
visited.
People
may think that way
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the raising
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raising
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rising
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number of international visitors who may not
familiar
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with the local culture. I believe educating visitors is hard, but using a little twist in both written and unwritten rules can show that having respect for places is possible. Several news about foreign
tourist
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tourists
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disrespecting a
tourist
attraction
was
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were
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being
a
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talk of the
town
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towns
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in several
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countries
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these recent years
,
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after
covid-19
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COVID-19
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cases lowered
down
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. One example
in
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is
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a temple in Bali, Indonesia, where a foreigner was seen eating "Sesajen" -- a collection of
food
placed on a
knitted-bamboo
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tray as
a praying rituals
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a praying ritual
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. She was
then
confronted by
local
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religious leader. It was reported that she did not know about the rituals
,
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and thought it was just free
food
. Another example
coming
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from Japan,
which
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where
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Government
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the Government
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decided to build
high
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a high
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net along the road near Mountain Fuji, where
foreigner
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foreigners
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oftenly
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often
stopped
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to take a picture
there
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. The crowd
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was reportedly disturb
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the
neigborhood
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neighbourhood
and many
people
was
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were
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seen crossing the road in a manner that may harm themselves, where Japanese always pay attention to safety first. These two examples showed that most
people
doing
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disrespectful things around some places is because they
were
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are
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not
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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about the local cultures,
although
some written rules may
seen
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see
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. In my hometown Bandung, similar things happened in one
tourist
attraction named Goa Jepang. Running around the
area
is restricted because it will be dangerous since the place is pit dark, but visitors keep on doing that until the management
give
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it a twist. They created
urban
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the urban
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story, which will be told by the guides, that the
area
is haunted by
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soldiers and
people
can hear the footsteps from time to time.
This
surprisingly
make
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people
walk almost
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,
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because they are both afraid and
wanted
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to hear the ghosts' footsteps.
Similar
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approach
also
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conducted in Singapore, where a Harry Potter exhibition was held
in
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on
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Santosa Island. To prevent
people
bringing
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from bringing
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food
to certain
area
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areas
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, they provided a small
area
with garbage bins and put
a
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up a
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big sign, conveying that the
further
part
will
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have "dangerous" magical creatures that
can
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sense
food
. Afraid something might happen,
people
willingly follow the
witter
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rules. In conclusion,
people
will follow the
instruction
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instructions
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of
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if
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they are interested in doing so. Creative ways can help
solving
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solve
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the problem and encourage
people
to be "responsible
tourist
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tourists
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".
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