In recent years, “responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These past few years,
people
are
arguing Wrong verb form
have been
on
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about
lack
of possibility someone can become a "Correct article usage
the lack
reponsible
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responsible
tourist
" or having
attention to take care of the culture and Verb problem
pay
sorroundings
of the places he/Correct your spelling
surroundings
se
visited. Correct your spelling
she
People
may think that way due to
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the raising
raising
number of international visitors who may not Correct your spelling
rising
familiar
with the local culture. I believe educating visitors is hard, but using a little twist in both written and unwritten rules can show that having respect for places is possible.
Several news about foreign Add a missing verb
be familiar
tourist
disrespecting a Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
tourist
attraction was
being Correct subject-verb agreement
were
a
talk of the Correct article usage
the
town
in several Fix the agreement mistake
towns
country
these recent yearsChange to a plural noun
countries
,
after Remove the comma
apply
covid-19
cases loweredCorrect your spelling
COVID-19
down
. One example Rephrase
apply
in
a temple in Bali, Indonesia, where a foreigner was seen eating "Sesajen" -- a collection of Correct your spelling
is
food
placed on a knitted-bamboo
tray as Correct your spelling
knitted bamboo
a praying rituals
. She was Correct the article-noun agreement
a praying ritual
praying rituals
then
confronted by local
religious leader. It was reported that she did not know about the ritualsAdd an article
a local
the local
,
and thought it was just free Remove the comma
apply
food
. Another example coming
from Japan, Verb problem
is
which
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where
Government
decided to build Correct article usage
the Government
high
net along the road near Mountain Fuji, where Correct article usage
a high
foreigner
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foreigners
oftenly
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often
stopped
to take a pictureWrong verb form
stop
there
. The crowd Rephrase
apply
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apply
was reportedly disturb
the Change the verb form
was reportedly disturbed
neigborhood
and many Correct your spelling
neighbourhood
people
was
seen crossing the road in a manner that may harm themselves, where Japanese always pay attention to safety first. These two examples showed that most Correct subject-verb agreement
were
people
doing
disrespectful things around some places is because they Wrong verb form
do
were
not Wrong verb form
are
knowledgable
about the local cultures, Correct your spelling
knowledgeable
although
some written rules may seen
.
In my hometown Bandung, similar things happened in one Change the verb form
be seen
see
tourist
attraction named Goa Jepang. Running around the area
is restricted because it will be dangerous since the place is pit dark, but visitors keep on doing that until the management give
it a twist. They created Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
urban
story, which will be told by the guides, that the Add an article
the urban
an urban
area
is haunted by japanese
soldiers and Change the capitalization
Japanese
people
can hear the footsteps from time to time. This
surprisingly make
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makes
people
walk almost tip toeing
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tiptoeing
,
because they are both afraid and Remove the comma
apply
wanted
to hear the ghosts' footsteps. Wrong verb form
want
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approach Add an article
A similar
also
conducted in Singapore, where a Harry Potter exhibition was held Add a missing verb
was also
in
Santosa Island. To prevent Change preposition
on
people
bringing
Change preposition
from bringing
food
to certain area
, they provided a small Fix the agreement mistake
areas
area
with garbage bins and put a
big sign, conveying that the Change preposition
up a
further
part will
have "dangerous" magical creatures that Wrong verb form
would
can
sense Wrong verb form
could
food
. Afraid something might happen, people
willingly follow the witter
rules.
In conclusion, Capitalize word
Witter
people
will follow the instruction
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instructions
of
they are interested in doing so. Creative ways can help Correct your spelling
if
solving
the problem and encourage Wrong verb form
solve
people
to be "responsible tourist
".Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
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