The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The given pie charts illustrate the sources of annual revenue and expenses
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USA based
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children’s charitable organization.
Overall
, donated food was the main source of
fund
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funds
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of
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this
charitable organization,
whereas
they spent most of their money on different program services.
According to
the illustration,
this
charity the organization earned exactly $53, 561,580
in
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this
year and used up $53,224,896. Their saving
in
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this
year has been just over 330,000 dollars. The majority of the revenue collected was generated by donations of food, which accounted for 86.6%. The contributions of the community and program comprised 10.4% and 2.2%, respectively. All the remaining sources, like government grants, investment
contributed
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and other income only 0.8% of the total revenue.
Also
, a huge sum of money (95.8%) was consumed by program services,
whereas
just 2.6% and 1.6% of the total expenses were spent
for
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fundraising
and
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management and general services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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