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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The diagram illustrates the
rate
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 of Australian
exports
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with
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 four countries between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
rate
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 of
exports
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 to
India
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 and
China
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 increased,
while
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 a downward trend was observed in the
rate
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 of
exports
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 to
Japan
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 and the US. Moving to a detailed analysis, the percentage of
exports
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 to
China
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 and
India
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 accounted for 2.5% and 1% of total Australian
exports
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, respectively. Over the next 10 years, the rates of
exports
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 to
China
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 and
India
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 doubled. 10 years
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, the percentage of
exports
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 to
China
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 increased significantly and reached 27%, and the
rate
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 of
exports
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 to
India
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 increased by 6%. From 2010 to the end of the period, export rates with
China
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 increased and reached the highest
rate
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 (30%),
whereas
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 the percentage of
exports
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 with
India
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 declined by 2%. In terms of
Japan
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 and the US, the
rate
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 of
exports
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 with the US fluctuated around 12% and 9%,
while
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 the
rate
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 of
exports
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 to
Japan
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 declined from 27% to 18% between 1990 and 2005. Over the next 7 years, both rates declined by 2% and finished the period at 16% (
Japan
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) and 7% (US).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, exports, india, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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