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‏The table below shows the water usage for different purposes in six different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where

‏The table below shows the water usage for different purposes in six different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where
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The table provides information about the amount of
water
expinduture
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expenditure
expenditures
 for various
purpose
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purposes
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 in different nations. It is clear from the graph that the agricultural
sector
 had the largest
percentages
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percentage
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 of
water
 used in most countries.
While
 the equivalent figure for the
use
 of
water
 in industrial sectors ranked the lowest in most regions .
According to
 what is shown, in Australia the amount of
use
 the
the
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in
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demostic
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domestic
 field had the highest percentage about 65%
wherase
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whereas
where
 the ratio of
water
consume
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consumed
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 in the industry
filed
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field
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 reached 32%.
How ever
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However
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, the percentage of
water
use
 for
Agricultural
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the Agricultural
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sector
 became the lowest.
On the other hand
, in the UK industrial and domestic had the same estimated rate of
water
consume
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consumption
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.
By contrast
,
Argicultuar
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the agricultural
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 field had
themost
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the most
 significant percentage of
water
uses
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use
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.
Moreover
, the
water
uses
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use
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 of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector
 in China was 87. In comparison, the ratio of
water
uses
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use
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 in two other
sectos
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sections
 plummetd to 7 % and 6% respectively. There was
fewest
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the fewest
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 amount of
water
use
 in
industrial
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the industrial
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sector
 in Australia.
Also
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 the rate of
water
uses
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use
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in
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for
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demostic
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domestic
purpose
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purposes
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 climbed to 65% .
Additionally
, the rate of
water
use
 in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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filed
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field
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 represented the highest in
india
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India
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 and
japan
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Japan
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sector, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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