The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the breakdown of monthly temperatures in Paris,
Dubai
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and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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,
while
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the
temperature
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in
Dubai
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increased throughout the month, the other two countries remained relatively the same in
January
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and December.
Sydney
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experienced the highest
temperature
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at the beginning of the month
while
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Paris had a low
temperature
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. The degree of hotness and coldness in
Dubai
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was roughly 24 Celcius in
January
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. The hotness decreased drastically to nearly 15 Celsius in June,
however
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, it remained relatively stable in the following three months before increasing sharply to almost 23 Celcius. In sharp contrast, the coldness in
Dubai
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and
Sydney
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stood at around 19 and 5 Celsius respectively in
January
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. Both countries witnessed a steady increase of about 31 and 15celcius respectively in June and remained the same in the next two months. Surprisingly, the temperatures decreased dramatically by nearly 20 in
Dubai
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in the month of December with
Sydney
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having the same
temperature
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in
January
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and December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dubai, sydney, temperature, january with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • major cities
  • trends
  • temperature changes
  • comparisons
  • yearly pattern
  • geographical location
  • climate zones
  • significant variations
  • notable differences
  • peak temperatures
  • lowest temperatures
  • fluctuations
  • seasonal changes
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