The graph below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in your countries in 1970 and 2000.

The graph below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in your countries in 1970 and 2000.
The bar chart compares the proportion of male and female workers who were 60-64 years old in four several different countries in 1970 and 2000. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that male workers dominated and Japan had the highest figure over a period of time.
Additionally
, more and more people worked in 2000, except in The USA and Australia. When it comes to Belgium, the rate of females was the lowest with under 10% in both years
while
its men were 79% in 2000 which quadrupled at the beginning.
In addition
, 40% and 43% belonged to female workers in 1970 and 2000 respectively with two folded male employees. In terms of others, the percentage of women's employment declined over three decades.
This
figure was 38% in The USA and 18% in Australia,
then
there was a slight fall of 2% in the next 30 years.
In contrast
, there were 47% and 55% belonged to The USA and Australia in 1970 climbing to 76% and 73% in the end respectively.

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