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The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002.

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of good
river
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 water
quality
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 in four distinct countries
Wales
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, Nothern Ireland, England and Scotland from 1990 to 2002.
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, there was an increase in the percentage of
quality
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 of
river
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 water in three countries
while
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 it witnessed a slight decline in
Wales
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.
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,
Wales
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 had the highest figures but
then
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 in 1999, it was overtaken by the rate of Northern Ireland's
river
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. Looking at the figure for Northern Ireland, the percentage of rivers
have
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that have
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 good chemical
quality
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 in N.I
was
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apply
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started at 85%, it remained the same until the year
of
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1998 and
then
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 it experienced a gradual increase to about 97% in 2002. The proportion of water
quality
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 in
Wales
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 country was 95% but it still remained in place until 1998 and
then
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 there was declined slightly to 80% in the
last
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 year of the period. Moving to England, the rate was 55%,after which it observed a considerable growth to 66% and a final drop to more than 57% in 2002. The Scotland
river
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 rate began at 55%, followed by a
dramatical
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 increase to 55%, but
then
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 it
finally
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 dropped to 40% in the
last
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 year of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, quality, wales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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