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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Contained in the given line graph is the information related to the
quantity
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number
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 of residents of a
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particular
particulart
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particular
 area who
participate
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participated
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 in 4 different sports from 1985 to 2005
Overall
 , it can be seen that tennis saw an increase in
participants
 ,
whereas
 Rugby had a decline . It is
also
 worth noting how throughout
this
 period , both
basketball
 and badminton remained unchanged with always more people joining
basketball
 . Regarding two sports which witnessed a noticeable change in the amount of
participants
 . As for Rugby , it stood at just under 250 people before significantly decreasing to about 50 until the end . By
constrast
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contrast
, throughout
20-year
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the 20-year
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 duration , there was a gradual rise in
tennis's
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tennis
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participants
 from just over 150 people to approximately 220 . Turning to the remaining sports which saw insignificant change ,
basketball
 and badminton in 1985
were
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had
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 nearly 50 and 80
participants
 , respectively . In terms of
basketball
 , between 1985 and 1995 , it increased slightly but soon remained constant until 2005 . Meanwhile , badminton decreased in
first
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the first
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 5 years before recovering and
stay
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staying
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 unchanged for the entire period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, basketball with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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