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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
#line #patients #clinic
The given graph provides information about the
number
 of
patients
 visiting different aspects of one hospital every week between 2010 and 2016.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
birth
control
 and
eye
clinic
 had the highest
number
 of
patients
,
while
 the diabetic and dental
was
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were
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 the lowest.
Furthermore
,
eye
, diabetic and dental showed an upward trend,
whereas
the
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apply
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birth
control
 showed fluctuation over the time frame. Regarding
birth
control
 and
eye
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the eye
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, from 2012,
birth
Correct article usage
the birth
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control
clinic
was
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apply
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received the highest
number
 of
patients
 and reached
apex
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an apex
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 at almost 280
patients
.
Additionally
, in the middle time of 2012, both the
birth
control
 and
eye
clinic
 had the same
number
 of
patients
 and the
birth
control
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 the depth. In terms of other clinics, dental reached the lowest point
on
Change preposition
in
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 2012 with 53
patients
 and
then
 showed an increase. In comparison, the diabetic
clinic
 went up from
period
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the period
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 of time between 2010 and 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, birth, control, eye, clinic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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