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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting for clinic of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
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The given graph provides information about the
number
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 of
patients
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 visiting different aspects of one hospital every week between 2010 and 2016.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
birth
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control
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 and
eye
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clinic
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 had the highest
number
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 of
patients
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,
while
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 the diabetic and dental
was
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were
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 the lowest.
Furthermore
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,
eye
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, diabetic and dental showed an upward trend,
whereas
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the
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apply
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birth
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control
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 showed fluctuation over the time frame. Regarding
birth
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control
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 and
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eye
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the eye
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, from 2012,
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birth
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the birth
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control
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clinic
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was
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apply
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received the highest
number
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 of
patients
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 and reached
apex
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an apex
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 at almost 280
patients
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.
Additionally
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, in the middle time of 2012, both the
birth
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control
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 and
eye
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clinic
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 had the same
number
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 of
patients
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 and the
birth
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control
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reach
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reached
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 the depth. In terms of other clinics, dental reached the lowest point
on
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in
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 2012 with 53
patients
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 and
then
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 showed an increase. In comparison, the diabetic
clinic
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 went up from
period
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the period
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 of time between 2010 and 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, birth, control, eye, clinic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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