The pie chart belows show the percentage of students on the one adult education centre taking various courses offered 1985 and this year.

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The given diagram illustrates

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information about the proportion of students who enrolled in different curriculums at an education

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for mature, from 1985 to nowadays.

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, it can be observed that the number of

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take

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part in art and modern languages

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cookery

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and fitness and dance

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no chance.

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, two courses that were local history and music appreciation disappeared and IT

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added. Looking at the

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of art

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in 1985 the rate of pupils in

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subject was about 17%

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this

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figure

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today

seen

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a reduction to 15%. In the past, the number of adults

learned

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modern languages

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accounted for nearly a quarter.

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, at

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present,

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percentage decreased to under a-fifth with just 17%. Meanwhile, the only course that

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rate is higher compared to the past

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cookery with 5% higher than

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in 1985

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with 19%. Turning onto the other subject, fitness and dance’s proportion is as same as

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past with about 22% in both years.

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, in the previous days, there were two curriculums which were music appreciation and local history with 8% and 15% in that order.

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, nowadays, IT replaced those courses and accounted for 27% of

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

205 words

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Sometimes it is better not to tell the truth. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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