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the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts below give statistical information on
housework
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 in
one
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 country from 1920 to 2019. The first
one
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 illustrates the percentage of
households
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 with electrical
appliances
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such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. The second
one
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 shares the number of
hours
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 the average household spends
on
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working around the house per week.
First,
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the line graphs on electrical
appliances
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illustrates
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 that the percentage of
households
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 using washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners generally rose over the
years
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. Interestingly, those utilising refrigerators started at nearly 0% in the 1920s, increasing rapidly over the next forty
years
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 until all
households
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 owned
one
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 in the 1980s. Meanwhile, the percentage of families using vacuum cleaners was
initially
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 30% and increased steadily until all of them possessed
one
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 in the 2000s.
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,
while
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 around 40% of homes had a washing machine in the 1920s,
this
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 figure surprisingly never reached 100% over the next century.
Next,
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the line graph on
housework
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 in
this
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 country had a downward trend over the same hundred
years
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.
Households
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 started with a staggering fifty
hours
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 a week maintaining their homes in the 1920s. Likely
due to
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 the
introducing
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introduction
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 of the aforementioned
elctrical
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electrical
appliances
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, the number of
hours
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 gradually declined until reaching a low of ten
hours
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 a week in 2019. The two diagrams demonstrated figures on
households
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 with electrical
appliances
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 and how much time they put towards
housework
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 over
one
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 hundred
years
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. There appears to be a negative correlation between the two as the number of homes with electrical devices increased at the same time the time they did
housework
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 decreased during that period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, one, households, appliances, hours, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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