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The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the following graph provides information concerning the sum of the community who did four different kinds of
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 from 1985 to 2005 generally speaking, in 1985 most of the
people
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 playing Rugby and the least chose Badminton as a sport, but in 2005 both kinds of activities had the same number of fans. As shown in the graph, the number of folks who played Rugby decreased over the period. It started at about 250
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 at the beginning of the period
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 gradually fell to 200
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 in the next two years and suddenly it dropped significantly to only 50
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, the Tennis players increased gradually from 150 communities in 1985 to approximately 220
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 in 2005. the folks who played Badminton and Basketball were shown the same pattern, it remained unchanged between 1985 and 2005, it is about 50 players and 70 players, respectively

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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