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he chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and prediction for future years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

he chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and prediction for future years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph reveals how many
people
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 moved to the cities from the countryside in three countries from 2000 and the predicted trends until 2025.
Overall
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, it is obvious that most countries saw an upward trend over the given period. What stands out is that the least number of migrants was seen in
Country
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 B, compared to the other countries.
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 with, by the turn of the twenty-first century,
country
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 A started with the most figures, at around 15
million
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people
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.
Then
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this
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country
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 experienced a significant increase and
this
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 upward trend is predicted to continue (reaching more than 85
million
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 migrants in 2025).
Country
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 C, with a slow start, saw a dramatic rise from 2005 and surpassed
Country
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 A’s figures after 2020.
This
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country
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 is predicted to see the most number of
people
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 who move to the urban areas in the next years.
On the other hand
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,
Country
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 B bucks the trend somewhat.
This
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country
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 started with approximately 15
million
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 migrants.
This
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 figure grew
up
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steadily
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then
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and then
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 reached a peak
at
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of
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 30
million
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people
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. It is predicted that
this
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 number will level
of
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off
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 in the next few years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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