The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.
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Contained in the two pie charts is information pertaining to how much time per day the grown-ups spent in six specific activities in one nation between 1958 and 2008.
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, travelling to work, working, and relaxing at home saw an increase,
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sleeping, and going out witnessed a decline and the others remained unchanged.
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, working had the highest percentage of
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movement throughout the timeframe. Looking at the figures in
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detail, the ratio of the day working stood at 33% in 1958, before recording 42% in 2008, making it the most time-consuming activity. Regarding relaxing at home, having begun at 8% in 1958, it rose substantially to 13% in 2008.
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daily spent in travelling to work increased from 2% in 1958 to nearly a tenth in 2008. Turning to the remaining statistics, where the time going out with friends or relatives and sleeping activities decreased dramatically, ranging from approximately a fifth to 32% in 1958 and between 6% and exactly a fourth in 2008 respectively. With respect to other activities including hobbies and playing sports, it remained stable, accounting for 6% throughout the time scale.
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