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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The table graph illustrates details about the railway system transportation in the following countries: ( United Arab Emirates, China,
Canada
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 and Malaysia) in the year
of
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2007.
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, it seems from the table that
Canada
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 had the lowest amount of
person's
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people
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 using
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rail
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transport
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.
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, it carried the highest billions of
tons
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. Meanwhile, China had the highest
number
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 of people with less
cargo
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 carried.
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 with,
Canada
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 had the least amount of humans using
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rail
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transport
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 with 0.3
million
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, 80
kilometres
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 per
head
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 which is
also
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 a decreased
number
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above all
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 the other countries.
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Although
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, it had the highest
cargo
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 carried with
a
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28.20
bilion
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billion
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tons
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. The following country is UAE, which was higher than
Canada
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 with 5.5
million
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of
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people using
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rail
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transport
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. The passenger
kilometres
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was
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were
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 780
kilometres
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 per
head
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 and 21.9 billion which is the smallest
number
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above
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 all. China had a huge total of humans using
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rail
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transport
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 accounting for 27
million
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.
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 to that, it had the longest passenger
kilometres
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 per
head
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 with a
number
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 of 1980. But it had a lower
cargo
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 carried with 23.01 billion
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tons
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. In terms of Malaysia, it was the second top usage by people in the railway which made up to 5.9
million
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. it had
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770 passenger
kilometres
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 per
head
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 and 22.2
billions
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billion
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 of
tons
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cargo
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 carried

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "above all".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, rail, transport, tons, number, cargo, million, kilometres, head with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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