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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The table graph illustrates details about the railway system transportation in the following countries: ( United Arab Emirates, China,
Canada
 and Malaysia) in the year
of
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2007.
Overall
, it seems from the table that
Canada
 had the lowest amount of
person's
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 using
the
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rail
transport
.
However
, it carried the highest billions of
tons
. Meanwhile, China had the highest
number
 of people with less
cargo
 carried.
To begin
 with,
Canada
 had the least amount of humans using
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rail
transport
 with 0.3
million
, 80
kilometres
 per
head
 which is
also
 a decreased
number
above all
 the other countries.
Although
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, it had the highest
cargo
 carried with
a
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28.20
bilion
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billion
of
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tons
. The following country is UAE, which was higher than
Canada
 with 5.5
million
of
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people using
the
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rail
transport
. The passenger
kilometres
was
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 780
kilometres
 per
head
 and 21.9 billion which is the smallest
number
above
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 all. China had a huge total of humans using
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rail
transport
 accounting for 27
million
.
In addition
 to that, it had the longest passenger
kilometres
 per
head
 with a
number
 of 1980. But it had a lower
cargo
 carried with 23.01 billion
of
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tons
. In terms of Malaysia, it was the second top usage by people in the railway which made up to 5.9
million
. it had
a
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770 passenger
kilometres
 per
head
 and 22.2
billions
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billion
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 of
tons
cargo
 carried
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "above all".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, rail, transport, tons, number, cargo, million, kilometres, head with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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