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Some people think that plastic shopping bags should be banned because they contribute to land and sea pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that there should be no room for plastic utensils
due to
 their contribution to the environmental impacts. The writer strongly agrees that they not only cause
the
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economic
cost
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 but
also
 lead to health concerns. Wasting money is one one the primary cores for prohibiting
plastics
.
In other words
, there has been a problem about releasing plastic into the environment causing pollution to people's habitat. Scenarios are the government have to switch on in order to make
a
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 environmental protection programme which can cost an arm.
Consequently
, the country can not focus on boosting the economy,
instead
, investing in preserving the ecosystem
due to
 bad awareness from residents. Another factor that subscribes to the plastic forbidden is the worry about individuals' health. Simply put, it is obvious that
plastics
 contain Polymers, one of the most harmful
chemical
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 to humans' fitness. If
plastics
 were emitted into marine life and the aquatics absorbed
those harmful stuff
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, they could enter the human food chain. Whenever people start to consume seafood contaminated with microplastics, they are more likely to ingest toxic chemicals which can lead to a potential risk of health problems. In conclusion, by banning
plastics
 from communities, individuals will avoid the preserving outlay
along with
 the prevention from strength illness.
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Try to include specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific studies or incidents that demonstrate the environmental and health impacts of plastic.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Pay close attention to your grammar and word choice. There are several minor errors that can be corrected to make your essay more polished.
task achievement
Your essay clearly presents a stance on the topic and sticks to it throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present, which provides a clear structure for your essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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