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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000.
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The given bar chart
illustrate
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amount
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the amount
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 of two main elements that give rise to the pollution in the air across 4 different commercial areas by 2000.
Overall
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,
most
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the most
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 noticeable is how
in
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Los Angeles and Mexico
city
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City
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 showed the number of N2O more than SO2,
while
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in
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the other cities took place the reverse situation.
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, all of
cities
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the cities
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in
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around the world displayed modest
figure
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 with the exception of Mexico
city
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that
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which
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double
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doubled
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. With regards to
2
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the 2
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cities where they exposed the majority of N2O being populated. In terms of Los Angeles,
this
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 region contained N2O with
max
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 at 104 and min at 39 micrograms per m3 which all overwhelm SO2
in
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on
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 the same side. Meanwhile, min and max S02 were 113 and 207 micrograms per m3 in Mexico
city
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, respectively. Turning to
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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