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The table and pie chart give information about population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.

The table and pie chart give information about population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.
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The pie chart compares the proportion of the population between Australia and other regions,
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 the table illustrates the percentage of nationalities who lived in either the countryside or city.
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, it can be seen that Australians made up the majority of the population which outnumbered the other countries.
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, there are more residents living in the city than in the countryside. With regards to the pie chart, Australians accounted for nearly
three quarter
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 of the population. As for the United Kingdom, it comprised exactly 7%, half of the others when compared to. The remaining nations saw a tiny fraction of residents, just under 5% each. Turning the focus to the table where the Chinese saw the most people living in the city, exactly 99%. As for New Zealanders and British, they made up about 90% and 89% in urban regions, respectively.
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, these figures were 9 times higher than the countryside ones. Meanwhile, in the remaining countries, just slightly over 80% of residents lived in urban areas.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic data
  • population distribution
  • nationality groups
  • urban planning
  • cultural diversity
  • social policy
  • demographic trends
  • rural vs. urban distribution
  • reflect on the implications
  • cultural exchange
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