The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Illustrating for consideration is information pertaining to the
tourists
who visited an Australian-specific holiday resort. From an observational perspective, the majority of
tourists
came from the US and Europe
while
the opposite was true for
Asian
and other regions
tourists
.
Additionally
,
Asian
and
American
tourists
have a relatively close interest
whereas
European
and other region visitors share a common preference. Regarding the pie chart,
European
and
American
travellers occupied the highest proportion of all, with 37% and 35% respectively. Below that were visitors from other regions with 18% and only one-tenth of the total were
Asian
tourists
. Turning to the table,
Asian
people normally spend a week on holiday but the duration is two times longer for
American
ones. It can be seen that
European
travellers travel for 16 days and other region travellers are 6 days shorter. In terms of accommodation, despite the
American
and
Asian
popular choices were 4-star and 5-star hotels,
European
and other regions prefer camping or caravan.
Lastly
,
although
the
Asian
and
American
main activity was sightseeing, it was swimming and sunbathing that Europeans enjoyed and surfing for other region
tourists
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, asian, american, european with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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