You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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males
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females
attending
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attend
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centre
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about
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among female
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females
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in contrast
the rate of sculpture Change preposition
among woman
woman
was the lowest rate . Fix the agreement mistake
women
While
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the largest number
was above 50 years whereas
the lowest per cent was under 20 years .
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were
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the number
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of
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men who attended drama Correct article usage
apply
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For painting
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For painting
courses
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for woman's
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for woman's
woman's
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women's
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reach
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to
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while
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for men's
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for men's
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men
men's
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men
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they
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reach
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a downward
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courses
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courses
attend
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attended
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reached
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, courses, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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