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the table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.

the table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
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Contained in the given infographics is data pertaining to the number of research
students
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 in Australian educational institutions in two distinct years, 2001 and 2010. In general, the most noticeable change related to the considerable proportion of local
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 in both years.
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 the new - recruiting of more global
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, the number of international ones experienced growth, respectively. In terms of the table's data, it is apparent that local
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 accounted for 33,657, six times as many as international
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 in 2001.
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, compared to global
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, which stood at 14,593, Indigenous
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 registered a significantly higher figure at 39,488 in 2010.
As a result
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this
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 gave rise to the large total of
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 with 54,081, which increased by 15,000
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. Moving onto the pie charts, in 2001, local
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 took up over three fourth with 87%,
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 international
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 were just 13%. In more detail for percentage of the local, indigenous males was on par with local females at around 43-44% and non-local males were 5% larger than non-local females. In 2010, global
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 increased which accounted for a quarter, particularly, 15% for non-local females and 12% for non-local males. Meanwhile, there was a pretty equivalence of the proportion of local men and local women, 35% and 38%.
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