The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?

In today's societal context, there is a
dramatical
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distinction between the rich and the poor which seems to be one of the controversial issues
occuring
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occurring
in every
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across the world. There are various factors
contribute
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to
this
problem;
therefore
,
this
essay will provide some reasons and effective solutions. It can be
undenieable
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undeniable
that
a
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capitalism is
underlying
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economy in many countries which positively affects not only their financial status but
also
financial stabilities.
This
kind of economics benefits superiors in terms of business,
however
, it significantly impacts
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the inferiors that people cannot find an opportunity to
florish
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flourish
in their career paths
due to
the
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social barriers.
Additionally
, a market share in some products is restricted by one of
big
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companies, leading to indirect compulsory
althernative
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alternative
alternatives
for consumers to consume its product only.
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, in Thailand, Gulfs is
only
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company providing electricity to domestic,
or
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all the convenience store is owned by CP. To solve those causes effectively,
firstly
,
government
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the government
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need to complete its tasks by increasing taxes for the elites and diminishing taxes for ordinary individuals,
such
as annual tax
payment
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payments
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.
As a result
, poor people can afford their lives properly and
also
the authority has more reserve funds to develop its state.
Secondly
, dividing more career opportunities
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among
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local
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locals
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tends to generate
monetaries
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monetary
to
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citizens, which allows residents to have
capability
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the capability
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to ascend themselves
in
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high
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a high
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living standard.
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, OTOP is a campaign that encourages locals to sell their products
for earning
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fund
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funds
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into
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in
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their hometown. In conclusion, all
mentioned
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causes can
be solve
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proficently
whether
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if
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government
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the government
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pay more attention to
reduce
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poverty
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the poverty
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rate in its nation by creating new tax
policy
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policies
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and job
opportunity
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opportunities
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to
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for
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the
poors
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poor
.
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language
Improve grammar and vocabulary to avoid errors and enhance clarity. For example, 'dramatically' instead of 'dramatical.'
task response
Expand on and better connect examples to broader points. Some points, like the impact of capitalism, can be more deeply explored.
task response
Good attempt at addressing the prompt comprehensively, discussing both causes and solutions.
coherence
The structure of the essay is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
The use of examples, such as the reference to 'Gulfs' in Thailand, helps illustrate points.

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  • Conclusion

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