The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?
In today's societal context, there is a
dramatical
distinction between the rich and the poor which seems to be one of the controversial issues Replace the word
dramatic
occuring
in every Correct your spelling
occurring
nations
across the world. There are various factors Change to a singular noun
nation
contribute
to Correct pronoun usage
that contribute
this
problem; therefore
, this
essay will provide some reasons and effective solutions.
It can be undenieable
that Correct your spelling
undeniable
a
capitalism is Remove the article
apply
underlying
economy in many countries which positively affects not only their financial status but Correct article usage
the underlying
also
financial stabilities. This
kind of economics benefits superiors in terms of business, however
, it significantly impacts to
the inferiors that people cannot find an opportunity to Change preposition
apply
florish
in their career paths Correct your spelling
flourish
due to
the
social barriers. Correct article usage
apply
Additionally
, a market share in some products is restricted by one of big
companies, leading to indirect compulsory Add an article
the big
althernative
for consumers to consume its product only. Correct your spelling
alternative
alternatives
For example
, in Thailand, Gulfs is only
company providing electricity to domestic, Add an article
the only
or
all the convenience store is owned by CP.
To solve those causes effectively, Correct word choice
and
firstly
, government
need to complete its tasks by increasing taxes for the elites and diminishing taxes for ordinary individuals, Add an article
the government
such
as annual tax payment
. Fix the agreement mistake
payments
As a result
, poor people can afford their lives properly and also
the authority has more reserve funds to develop its state. Secondly
, dividing more career opportunities to
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among
local
tends to generate Fix the agreement mistake
locals
monetaries
Correct your spelling
monetary
to
citizens, which allows residents to have Change preposition
for
capability
to ascend themselves Change the article
the capability
in
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to
high
living standard. Correct article usage
a high
For example
, OTOP is a campaign that encourages locals to sell their products for earning
Change preposition
to earn
fund
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funds
into
their hometown.
In conclusion, all Change preposition
in
mentioned
causes can Correct article usage
the mentioned
be solve
proficently Change the verb form
be solved
whether
Correct word choice
if
government
pay more attention to Correct article usage
the government
reduce
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reducing
poverty
rate in its nation by creating new tax Add an article
the poverty
policy
and job Fix the agreement mistake
policies
opportunity
Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
to
the Change preposition
for
poors
.Correct your spelling
poor
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language
Improve grammar and vocabulary to avoid errors and enhance clarity. For example, 'dramatically' instead of 'dramatical.'
task response
Expand on and better connect examples to broader points. Some points, like the impact of capitalism, can be more deeply explored.
task response
Good attempt at addressing the prompt comprehensively, discussing both causes and solutions.
coherence
The structure of the essay is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
The use of examples, such as the reference to 'Gulfs' in Thailand, helps illustrate points.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.
You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...