The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?

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In today's societal context, there is a

dramatical

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distinction between the rich and the poor which seems to be one of the controversial issues

occuring

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occurring

in every

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across the world. There are various factors

contribute

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problem;

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this

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essay will provide some reasons and effective solutions. It can be

undenieable

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undeniable

that

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capitalism is

underlying

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economy in many countries which positively affects not only their financial status but

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financial stabilities.

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kind of economics benefits superiors in terms of business,

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, it significantly impacts

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the inferiors that people cannot find an opportunity to

florish

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flourish

in their career paths

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the

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social barriers.

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, a market share in some products is restricted by one of

big

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companies, leading to indirect compulsory

althernative

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alternative

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for consumers to consume its product only.

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, in Thailand, Gulfs is

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company providing electricity to domestic,

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all the convenience store is owned by CP. To solve those causes effectively,

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government

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the government

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need to complete its tasks by increasing taxes for the elites and diminishing taxes for ordinary individuals,

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as annual tax

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payments

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, poor people can afford their lives properly and

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the authority has more reserve funds to develop its state.

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, dividing more career opportunities

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local

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locals

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tends to generate

monetaries

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monetary

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citizens, which allows residents to have

capability

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to ascend themselves

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high

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living standard.

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, OTOP is a campaign that encourages locals to sell their products

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fund

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funds

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into

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their hometown. In conclusion, all

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causes can

be solve

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proficently

whether

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government

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the government

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pay more attention to

reduce

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poverty

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the poverty

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rate in its nation by creating new tax

policy

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policies

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and job

opportunity

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opportunities

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the

poors

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poor

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language

Improve grammar and vocabulary to avoid errors and enhance clarity. For example, 'dramatically' instead of 'dramatical.'

task response

Expand on and better connect examples to broader points. Some points, like the impact of capitalism, can be more deeply explored.

task response

Good attempt at addressing the prompt comprehensively, discussing both causes and solutions.

coherence

The structure of the essay is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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The use of examples, such as the reference to 'Gulfs' in Thailand, helps illustrate points.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – Problems
Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

One of the first problems of the...
Another problem that needs to be considered...
A possible solution to this problem would be...
One immediate practical solution is to...

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to solve environmental problems is increase the fuel cost? do you agree or disagree?

The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?