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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The table illustrates data about
train
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trains
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 as a means of
transportaion
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transportation
 in four nations, namely Malaysia,
Canada
,
China
 and the UAE, in the given period of 2007.
Overall
,
China
 had the highest number of
people
 using rail transport and passenger
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per individual.
While
,
Canada
 train transport was the least
regadring
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regarding
 attendees, but surprisingly the highest quantity of
cargo
 amongst the other countries.
To begin
,
China
 had 27
millions
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million
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of
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people
 partaking
its
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in its
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 rail system in 2007,
whish
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which
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 was the highest regarding
to
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the number of
people
used
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using
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 trains.
While
 Malaysia had 5.9
millions
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million
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 and the UAE had 5.5
millions
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million
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 respectively.
Canada
,
on the other hand
, had the least amount of
people
prefering
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preferring
 rail transport, with just 300
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2007.
Also
,
China
 had the most prominent number of passengers
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in kilometers
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 per individual which was 1980
kilomerters
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kilometres
.
Besides
, their carried
cargo
weighted
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weighed
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 about 23.01
billions
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billion
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of
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tons
.
Next,
the UAE and Malaysia had minor differences regarding passenger
kilometers
 and their carried
cargo
 weight, which were 780 and 770 per head of population with 21.9
billions
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billion
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tons
 and 22.2
billions
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billion
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tons
, respectively. Ultimately,
Canada
 witnessed the least accounted
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per individual, which was only 80
kilomerters
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kilometres
.
Nevertheless
, surpassed in regards
of
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to
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 carried
cargo
 weight with 23.01
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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tons
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, china, people, kilometers, cargo, billions, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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