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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the amount of teaching done by primary, lower secondary, and upper secondary
school
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teachers
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 in four different countries in 2001.
Overall
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,
teachers
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 in the USA taught significantly more than
teachers
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 in the remaining three countries.
Furthermore
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, upper secondary
school
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teachers
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 generally worked more
hours
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 than other
teachers
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. In 2001, upper secondary
school
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teachers
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 in the USA taught around 1100
hours
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 per
year
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.
This
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 was closely followed by lower secondary
school
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teachers
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, who did only slightly fewer than 1100
hours
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, compared to
U.S
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U.S.
 primary
school
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teachers
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, who taught less than 900
hours
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 per
year
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. In Ireland, both upper and lower secondary
school
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teachers
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 taught approximately 800
hours
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 per
year
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,
while
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 their primary
school
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 counterparts did around 600. Meanwhile, both primary and lower secondary
school
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teachers
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 in Japan and Spain taught for approximately 600
hours
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 per
year
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 in 2001.
Similarly
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, upper secondary
school
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teachers
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 in Japan
also
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 only taught for around 600
hours
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,
while
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 their Spanish counterparts spent around 1000
hours
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 teaching per
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, teachers, hours, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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