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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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the chart provided demonstrated the percentage of people who can'
t
 read in the world, which
depend
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depends
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 on the region and the gender in the previous year.
overall
, there
are
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 a
significantly percent
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significant percentage
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 of
illiteracy
between
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in
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 sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states
and
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south
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South
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 Asia and
the
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other regions.
The south
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South
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 Asia had the highest percentage in six
area
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.
first,
in 3 areas had a higher rate of
illiteracy
. the majority of
sex
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the sex
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 who can'
t
 read is
female
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a female
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account
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 for the ratio higher than the male, which
over
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was over
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 four in ten
in
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last
 year.
furthermore
, the
man
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men
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 in Arab states can'
t
 literacy lower than two regions
is
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29 percent turning to the
remain
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 charts, the areas
had
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the people can read
is
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were
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 higher than
the
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illiteracy
 so
in
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the
develop
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developed
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 countries had the lowest
illiteracy
 rates over the period.
Similarly
, the 2 others had the
percent
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percentage
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 stood at
20percent
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20 per cent
 or lower.
moreover
, the female in
east
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East
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 Asia Oceania had
the
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a
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 rate higher over double time than the male who can'
t
 read.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words t, illiteracy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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