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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exampes from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a new trend among
companies
 to distinguish their goods by pointing out
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 uniqueness in the commercials. They do it to establish their brand identity, though it can be confusing for the consumers sometimes.
However
,
i
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 firmly believe that
this
 is
benifitial
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beneficial
 for the buyers. There are various reasons that compel a corporation to do
this
 practice. Primarily, the market is very
competetive
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competitive
 and
this
 can give them an edge. People love to use newer and better
stuffs
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stuff
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, by saying their product is new, businesses try to act on that urge.
For instance
, Microsoft
anounced
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announced
 that Windows 10 would be the
last
 version of their operating system and
they
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that they
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will
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 only provide updates to it in future. Yet, when they experienced
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 market share drop, they
launced
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launched
 Windows 11.
This
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
 of
this
 culture goes to mainly the users. As these
companies
 try their best to be
to
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true to their words, they spend a lot of money
in
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on
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 research and development to be
competetive
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competitive
.
As a result
, people get a lot of
uptions
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options
,
as well as
 better better products when they go shopping. The chips market is the perfect example of that. Brands try to find unique
taste
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 to serve the palate of the customers,
this
led
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 to the
productions
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production
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 of
hundrades
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hundreds
 of flavours.
Conversely
,
this
 can create misunderstanding among buyers. We typically compare goods from different businesses before
doing
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 a purchase decision. Different type of naming and branding of similar
product
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products
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 makes it difficult.
For example
, Intel and AMD used to name their processors in a way that customers could
could
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compare them properly before buying.
However
, now both
companies
 changed their naming, which has made
comparision
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comparison
 tougher.
To conclude
,
this
 exercise of emphasising that their product has something new by corporations can make buying
decision
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decisions
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 difficult. But
this
 was,
companies
 can differentiate their products, which make the customers the ultimate
benefitiary
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beneficiary
.
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coherence
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors to improve overall clarity and coherence. For example, correct 'benifit' to 'benefit', 'competetive' to 'competitive', and 'uption' to 'option'.
coherence
Enhance the logical flow between paragraphs. Linking phrases or transitional sentences can help bridge ideas more smoothly and maintain the coherence of the essay.
task achievement
Provide more detailed and specific examples where possible. This can help to better illustrate the points being made and solidify your argument.
task achievement
Work on varying sentence structures and using more advanced sentence constructions to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.
task achievement
The essay appropriately addresses the task, discussing both the reasons businesses emphasize the newness of their products and the potential positive and negative impacts of this trend.
coherence and cohesion
Good introduction and conclusion that provide a clear framework for the essay and summarize the main points effectively.
task achievement
Examples provided, such as the Microsoft Windows versions and the chips market, are relevant and help to elucidate the points being made.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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