Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been postitive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your opinion.

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Avoid repetition of words like 'high lifestyle' and try to use varied vocabulary to make your writing more engaging.
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You have made a good attempt to discuss both positive and negative aspects of modern lifestyles.
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Your conclusion attempts to summarize the points discussed in the essay, which is good practice.

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