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the table below shows the results of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university

the table below shows the results of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university
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The statistics provide information on the percentage of students giving good ratings for different
aspects
 of a university from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, what is notable from the chart is that all
aspects
 witnessed an upward
tren
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 except for
range
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 of modules offered which took an opposite direction and buildings which
was
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 unchanged. Among all
he
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aspects
,
print
resources
 held the top spot at the start;
however
,
this
 position belonged to both
print
resources
 and electronic
resources
at the end
 of the period. At the start of the period, with 84%,
print
resources
 emerged as the leading aspect.
This
 was followed by buildings and teaching quality, with respective figures for 77% and 65%. The figures for the remaining categories varied slightly, ranging from 32% to 45%.
Thereafter
, the proportion of
print
resources
 experienced a significant increase to 88% in 2010;
therefore
, it ranked first.
Similarly
, the figures for
two
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 remaining
aspects
 of a university, teaching quality and electronic
resources
, all increased to 69% and 88%.
Conversely
,
range
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 of modules offered underwent a downward trend in the percentage of the good survey, with a slight decline to 27%
at the end
 of the period.
Finally
, buildings remained at 77% between 2000 and 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aspects, print, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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