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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.
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The bar chart illustrates the students' preference for the five different
subjects
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,
while
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 the two middle
schools
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 compare each other.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are significant differences between the two middle
schools
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, even though the academic
subjects
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 are not famous in both
schools
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.
According to
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 the data, among the academic subject which contains math, science, and literature, only literature subject is preferred in
school
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 B, recorded at 38%, approximately.
In contrast
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, math and science
subjects
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 aren't accepted as favourite
subjects
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 in both
schools
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 which is lower than 20% . It is noteworthy that the students in
school
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 B tend to prefer indoor activities like drawings, but the students in
school
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 A tend to like outdoor activity
subjects
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. The sports
subjects
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 are mainly preferred in
school
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 A
while
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 the other
subjects
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 are not recorded more than 20%.
This
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 subject is recorded at 72% in
school
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 A which is
school
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 B recorded at only 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, schools, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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