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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Given is a bar chart illustrating the distribution of
students
' subject preferences from two middle schools. The horizontal axis represents various subjects,
while
 the vertical axis quantifies the
number
 of
students
 who favour each subject. Apparently, juniors from
school
 A and
school
 B have diverse favourite subjects, sport enjoys the most popularity among the
students
 from the former one, which is favoured by 36
students
,
while
 25
students
 report that craft and drawing are the most popular subjects in
school
 B.
On the other hand
, the least
number
 of
students
 in
school
 A love
craft
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crafts
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 and drawing, but it is science that attracts the least
number
 of
students
 in
school
 B.
Besides
 that, there is a minimum difference in the
number
 of
students
 who favour social science between the two schools, which is 6 and 10 separately.
In contrast
, the preference for sport shows the greatest difference, which is 36 and 5
accordingly
Rephrase
respectively
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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