In many countries, people are now living longer than ever Before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?
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governments
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countries
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facilities
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this
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as this
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elderly
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governments
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governments
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the nation
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nation's
supporting
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support
population
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