A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. She/he has asked you for advices about living in your city. In your letter: Suggest an interesting part of the city to live in Describe the public transfortation in your city Say how your friend can meet new people in there

I hope
this
letter finds you in good health. I am writing
this
letter to inform you regarding some
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recommendations
recomendations
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recommendations
for you in living in my city.
Firstly
,
i
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am going to tell you about the place
for living
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to live
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. There are several places that have magnificent
view
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views
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,
environment
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environments
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, and
building
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buildings
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.
However
,
i
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I
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would happily introduce you to my current
residance
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residence
. It is Melbourn
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Residence
Residance
which is located in
highland
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of Gajah Mada Street. The building looks very nice, particularly when the sun rises in the early morning.
Besides
, the environment is
also
clean because the cleaning services are scheduled very well, so the environment is nicely clear by the
thrases
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phrases
phrase
.
Also
, the view of the
montain
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mountain
mountains
and hill is really gorgeous. You can see two hills behind the
residance
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residence
and a mountain next to the hills.
Secondly
, the transportation in my
residance
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residence
is mostly dominated by bus which is costly
affordable
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for
the
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apply
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people
who want to save
their
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apply
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money. So
the
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people
often go to
bus
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the bus
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station to wait for the bus that will take them to their workplace. Another important thing about my
residance
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residence
is the way the
people
meet each other during the day where
people
are often greeted by their neighbour. So, do not be surprised if the
neighbour
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are saying hi to you all the time you meet with them.
Finally
,
Iam
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I am
sorry for the late reply
of
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your letter. Thank you for your nice concern in advance. Hopefully, you are able to consider
this
as a good
choise
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choice
to stay in my
residance
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residence
. I cannot wait to see you. Yours Sincerely Anong
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coherence cohesion
Try to divide your content into clearer paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea. For example, one paragraph could solely describe the interesting part of the city, another for public transportation, and another for ways to meet people.
task achievement
You can improve the letter by carefully proofreading the text to catch typos and language errors (e.g., 'recomendations' should be 'recommendations', 'residance' should be 'residence', 'thrases' should be 'trash').
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and helpful, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
task achievement
You provided a comprehensive response to all parts of the task, giving suggestions on where to live, describing public transportation, and explaining how to meet new people.
coherence cohesion
Your opening and closing statements create a warm and engaging impression.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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