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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the changes on an
island
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 after some constructions
be
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are
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 built in terms of tourism. Apparently,
two-third
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two-thirds
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 of the
island
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 has been constructed with abundant tourist-orientation facilities,
while
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 the beach and most of the
trees
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 were unaltered. Before becoming a leisure resort, the
island
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 was monotonous
that
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and
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 it only had a few
trees
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 growing on both the east and the west.
Besides
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, a beach was located on the west-end
island
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. Afterwards, the
island
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 is mainly composed of accommodation,
acompanying
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accompanying
 with a dining space and a reception
center
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centre
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. Regarding a pier
in
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on
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 the southern
island
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, two
sailers
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sailors
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 were increased on both sides of it.
On
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In
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 the east sector, the beach has become able to swim, and footpaths
allowed
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allow
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tourist
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tourists
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 to access
to
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apply
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it. With six
accommadations
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accommodations
accommodation
 built around a bunch of
trees
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 which settled at the exact same place,
vehicle
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 track was constructed in order to connect the rooms and the reception. There were nine
accommadations
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accommodations
accommodation
along with
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 footpaths
on
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in
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 the middle of the
island
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, where were a empty land. There were no
signifant
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significant
 changes on the eastern
island
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, except two
trees
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 on the southern-east were moved to the edge
for sparing
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to spare
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 some space for the tourists.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Before and after
  • Tourist facilities
  • Infrastructure development
  • Geographical location
  • Natural resources
  • Landmarks
  • Newly constructed
  • Transportation and accessibility
  • Leisure centers
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation efforts
  • Socio-economic impacts
  • Employment opportunities
  • Local populations
  • Accommodation facilities
  • Economic development
  • Route networks
  • Hospitality industry
  • Tourism influx
  • Eco-friendly solutions
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