The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph displays the number of young
people
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who played seven different types of games between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the highest number of
adults
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practised gentle walking throughout the given
period
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,
while
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the lowest were in basketball at the beginning of the
period
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and cricket
at the end
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of the
period
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. In 1997, half of the young
people
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prefer gentle walking.
Adults
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who participated in jogging, aerobics, football, and hiking were at the same rate around 30%.
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, the third most sport to play was cricket at about 28%.
By contrast
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, less than 10% of youth took part in basketball games. Gentle walking stayed the most favorable sport among
adults
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, in 2017, at around 55%.
And about
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50 per cent of young
people
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played hiking and football in 2017,
while
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jogging and aerobic sports were around 35%.
In contrast
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to the number of
adults
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who played basketball at the beginning of the
period
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, almost 25% of young
people
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played it in 2017, which was 15% higher. The lowest rate in 2017 was for cricket less than 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, adults, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • adult demographic
  • comparison
  • percent change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trend analysis
  • sports popularity
  • ranking changes
  • general patterns
  • social factors
  • 20-year period
  • time span
  • major sports
  • data interpretation
  • highlight features
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