The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
The given table depicts the proportion of 6800 adults (from 16 years old and up) participating in diverse cultural events over a year.
Overall
, it can be seen that the figure for engagement was greater among the youngest
age
bracket, with the exception of computer-based.
Additionally
, writing had less choice from people than other categories. Looking at the youngest
age
group, where performances and visual arts were mostly prevalent, accounting for 35% and 30% respectively. Notably, the proportions for crafts and purchases were similar at exactly 11%,
while
writing and computer-based were recorded at around 14%. Regarding the 25-44
age
category, the performances still captured the interest of a considerable proportion, observing 22%, four times that of writing. The other activities ranged from nearly a tenth to 17%. Moving onto the 45 to 74
age
group, where the lowest participation was seen in writing
as well as
computer-based (5%).
Additionally
, the remaining events were under 20% apart from crafts with a figure of about 22%. In terms of the
last
age
cohort, who exhibited a marked preference for performances
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its proportion attained around 20%.
This
was followed by nearly 17% crafts, acquisition
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visual arts,
whereas
the domain of writing and computer-based were under 10%.
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