The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008 (Steve no copyright)
The two pie charts depict the proportions of
time
adults in a specific country allocated to various Use synonyms
activities
in 1958 and 2008. The units are expressed as percentages.
In summary, adults dedicated the majority of their day to sleeping and working in both years, Use synonyms
whereas
other Linking Words
activities
were significantly less Use synonyms
time
-consuming. Notably, the allocation of Use synonyms
time
to work-related Use synonyms
activities
was higher in 2008 compared to 1958, Use synonyms
while
the duration spent on other tasks generally increased.
Examining sleeping and working Linking Words
first,
these two Linking Words
activities
predominated the daily schedules. In 1958, the proportion of Use synonyms
time
allocated to sleeping was approximately 32%, marginally less than the 33% devoted to working. By 2008, the Use synonyms
time
dedicated to working had significantly increased to 42%, Use synonyms
whereas
the Linking Words
time
spent sleeping declined to 25%.
Turning to the remaining four Use synonyms
activities
, which occupied smaller segments of the day, the percentage of Use synonyms
time
spent socializing outside the home in 1958 was 19%, more than three times the 6% in 2008. Use synonyms
Conversely
, the Linking Words
time
devoted to relaxing at home rose from 8% in 1958 to 13% in 2008. The proportion of Use synonyms
time
spent commuting to work escalated from 2% in 1958 to 8% in 2008. Use synonyms
Finally
, the category of 'other chores' remained constant at 6% in both years.Linking Words
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