The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates information pertaining to the means of transportation that
tourists
used to travel in one specific country from 1989 to 2009.
Overall
, the proportion of
tourists
using rail, coach and ferry experienced an upward trend,
whereas
the opposite was true for car and air declining throughout the time frame.
Additionally
, not only did the number of
tourists
using rail observe an increase but it
also
became the highest percentage
at the end
of the period. Looking at the statistics for rail in
further
detail, it increased significantly from around 35% to exactly 60%, becoming the most used
mean
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of transport to travel. Coach and ferry,
however
, estimated smaller increases to exactly one-fifth and more than one-tenth from just under 10% between 1989 and 2004, respectively.
Subsequently
, the percentage of
tourists
using coach rose continuously to approximately 25%,
while
ferry
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ferries
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observed a decline to just under one-tenth in the final year.
In contrast
, the proportion of visitors using
car
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cars
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increased gradually from half in 1989 to more than 60% in 1999, where it reached its peak before decreasing moderately to more than 50% in 2009.
However
, the number of
tourists
travelling by air saw a different trend, declining steadily to more than one-fifth from under double that during the period.
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